One of the most common pieces of feedback IB students receive on their Internal Assessment is that their work is “too descriptive.” This can be confusing and frustrating, especially when the writing is accurate, detailed, and well researched. Many students don’t understand what description actually means in an IA context — or why it limits marks so quickly.

Understanding why IAs become descriptive is the first step toward fixing the problem.

Description Feels Safer Than Analysis

Description feels safe because it relies on knowledge rather than judgment. When students describe:

• What happened
• What something is
• What the data shows

they are unlikely to be “wrong.” Analysis, however, requires interpretation, explanation, and decision-making — which feels riskier.

As a result, students often default to description, especially when they are unsure what examiners expect.

Description Explains What — Analysis Explains Why

A useful way to identify description is to look at the type of thinking involved.

Descriptive writing:

• Explains facts or processes
• Summarises information
• Reports results

Analytical writing:

• Explains why something happened
• Interprets significance
• Links evidence to the research question

If most paragraphs stop at “what,” the IA will struggle to access higher marks.

Too Much Background Encourages Description

Many IAs become descriptive because students spend too long on background sections. While some context is necessary, excessive background often leads to:

• Repeating textbook information
• Explaining concepts without application
• Delaying analysis until later

Examiners expect students to move quickly from explanation to interpretation.

Weak Focus Encourages Description

When the research question is too broad or unclear, students often describe because they don’t know what to analyse.

This leads to:

• General explanations
• Listing points rather than developing them
• Difficulty drawing conclusions

Clear focus naturally pushes students toward analysis.

Description Limits Evaluation

Evaluation depends on having something specific to judge. When an IA is mostly descriptive:

• Evaluation becomes generic
• Limitations are vague
• Conclusions repeat earlier points

This caps marks across multiple criteria, not just one section.

How to Tell If Your IA Is Too Descriptive

Warning signs include:

• Long paragraphs with no clear argument
• Frequent phrases like “this shows that” without explanation
• Sections that could apply to many different questions

If analysis feels thin or repetitive, description is likely the issue.

How to Shift From Description to Analysis

Students can improve by:

• Asking “why does this matter?” after each point
• Linking evidence directly back to the question
• Explaining implications, not just outcomes

Small changes in how sentences are developed can make a big difference.

Analysis Is a Skill, Not a Talent

Many students believe analysis is something you either “have” or don’t. In reality, it is a skill that improves with structure and practice.

Most students struggle with analysis because they haven’t been shown a clear process for doing it consistently.

Using a Clear Coursework Framework

A structured coursework framework helps students:

• Recognise descriptive writing
• Understand what analysis looks like
• Build analytical thinking into every section

If you’re working on any IB IA or the Extended Essay, following a clear coursework system can help you move beyond description and unlock higher marks.

You can find a step-by-step guide to developing analysis in IB coursework here:
👉 https://www.revisiondojo.com/coursework-guide

Final Thoughts

Most IB IAs are too descriptive not because students lack ability, but because they rely on safe explanations instead of interpretation. By understanding the difference between describing and analysing — and by using a clear structure to guide thinking — students can dramatically improve their IA quality and access higher mark bands.