IB Philosophy SL Internal Assessment Example

You state the philosophical issue clearly and explicitly from the outset.

You connect the stimulus to the issue with specific, relevant details rather than only summarizing the plot.

You show a clear focus on freedom of choice and moral responsibility, which gives the essay a precise direction.

You could further sharpen the issue by separating the two questions more distinctly: choice and responsibility.

The introduction would be stronger if you signposted the precise line of argument you will follow next.

Your essay is easy to follow and presented in a readable, orderly way.

You use clear transitions such as contrasting phrases to guide the reader through the argument.

Your paragraphs have identifiable purposes and the conclusion returns to the main question.

Some transitions could be tighter so that each step in the argument is even more explicitly signposted.

At times the discussion of free choice and organizer responsibility overlaps, which slightly reduces precision in organization.