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IB History HL Internal Assessment Exemplar: Why did Khomeini target Iranian women and how did he target them in 1977-1981?
Why did Khomeini target Iranian women and how did he target them in 1977-1981?
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4.1·Suggestion
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A more detailed table of contents with descriptive subheadings and consistent formatting would guide the reader more effectively through each section.
4.2·Suggestion
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Check consistency in citation format (e.g., italics, punctuation) to adhere to academic conventions and enhance credibility.
Criteria A: Identification and evaluation of sources
5/6
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3
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Criteria Strands
Excellent
Research question formulation
Good
Source selection and relevance
Excellent
Source analysis and evaluation
Criteria Feedback
Clearly stated and focused research question specifying place, period and themes
Selection of two credible peer-reviewed articles directly relevant to the question
Detailed OPVL-style evaluation addressing origin, purpose and content of each source
Minor ambiguity in the term “target” could have been tightened
Explanation of relevance remains broad; links to specific “why” and “how” elements could be deeper
Evaluation occasionally asserts limitations without concrete examples or link back to the research question
1.1·Strength
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The student clearly states a focused and answerable research question specifying place, period, and themes, meeting top-band requirements.
1.2·Suggestion
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Consider clarifying the term “target” in the research question to specify whether it pertains to legal, social, or physical dimensions to avoid ambiguity.
1.3·Strength
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The student selects two credible peer-reviewed articles directly relevant to the research question, showing good source selection.
1.4·Weakness
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The relevance descriptions remain broad; link each source’s specific arguments or data to the “why” and “how” aspects of the research question to deepen the explanation.
1.5·Suggestion
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Try explicitly stating how the defined aspects (dress code, occupation, education) directly answer the research question’s “target” and “method” components.
1.6·Strength
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The OPVL-style labels for value and limitation demonstrate a methodical approach to source evaluation, reflecting good understanding of origin and purpose.
1.7·Weakness
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Limitations are stated assertively but lack specific examples; include evidence (e.g., contrasting data) to substantiate how temporal coverage or secondary reliance affects usefulness.
1.8·Suggestion
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Consider linking each OPVL point back to your investigation’s needs: explain how each value and limitation influences your ability to answer your research question.
1.9·Strength
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The works cited list demonstrates breadth, including multiple peer-reviewed journals covering diverse aspects of the revolution.
Criteria B: Investigation
2/15
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8
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Criteria Strands
Moderate
Organization and clarity
Poor
Critical analysis and evidence use
Poor
Perspective evaluation and conclusion
Criteria Feedback
Logical overall structure with an introduction, thematic sub-headings and a conclusion
Topic sentences and transitions guide the reader through the argument
Predominantly descriptive narrative with very limited critical analysis and no primary evidence
Repetitive discussion of the same examples (e.g., the veil) without consolidation
Minimal evaluation of differing perspectives and no reasoned weighing of viewpoints
2.1·Weakness
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The recurring focus on the veil in multiple paragraphs leads to redundancy; consolidate points to sharpen the narrative flow.
2.2·Strength
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The introduction clearly sets the historical context and outlines the investigation’s parameters, contributing to overall coherence.
2.3·Suggestion
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Incorporate primary sources (e.g., government decrees, eyewitness accounts) alongside secondary analysis to strengthen evidential support.
2.4·Suggestion
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Introduce counter-evidence or dissenting perspectives to evaluate the robustness of the claim that religious ideology alone drove policy decisions.
2.5·Weakness
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The section largely narrates events; deepen critical analysis by linking evidence to causal claims and contrasting alternative interpretations.
2.6·Weakness
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Multiple perspectives are presented without systematic evaluation; assess bias, reliability, and significance of each viewpoint.
2.7·Suggestion
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Use a short evaluative framework to compare sources on key criteria (e.g., proximity, bias) to ground your perspective analysis in evidence.
2.8·Suggestion
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Rather than restating findings, derive a reasoned conclusion by weighing evidence and showing how it leads to your final judgment.
2.9·Strength
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The conclusion succinctly restates main findings and echoes the research question, providing closure to the argument.
2.10·Weakness
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The works cited rely almost exclusively on secondary sources; incorporating primary documents would strengthen the investigation’s evidential base.
Criteria C: Reflection
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2
4
Criteria Strands
Good
Methods reflection
Good
Historical challenges awareness
Good
Connection to investigation
Criteria Feedback
Clear reflection on what the investigation revealed about historical methods (chronology, religious context)
Explicit awareness of challenges facing historians (source bias, reliance on secondary material)
Direct linkage between reflection observations and the student’s own investigation process
Reflection remains largely descriptive without probing how methods shaped interpretation of specific evidence
Challenges are noted but not explored or paired with potential methodological responses
Does not discuss how the reflection might inform revisions to the investigation
3.1·Strength
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The reflection identifies chronology and contextual analysis as key historical methods, demonstrating a clear methodological focus.
3.2·Suggestion
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Illustrate how applying Islamic context analysis altered your understanding of a key event or source, to make the reflection more analytical.
3.3·Weakness
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Reflection remains descriptive; deepen insight by explaining how these methods influenced your interpretation of specific evidence.
3.4·Weakness
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Challenges are noted but not critically explored; discuss potential strategies historians could use to mitigate limited perspectives or source biases.
3.5·Suggestion
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Consider suggesting how triangulation of sources or oral histories might address gaps identified in secondary source research.
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