IB History HL Internal Assessment Example

You asked a focused, historically bounded, and analytical question that gives your investigation a clear line of enquiry.

You selected two relevant and complementary sources that help you move from immediate evidence to broader context.

You evaluated the sources with attention to origin, purpose, content, value, and limitations.

Some source criticisms are a little too general, especially where you need more precise explanation of what each source can and cannot show.

Your referencing is not fully consistent, which weakens the presentation of the evidence you discuss.

A few parts of the source evaluation become unclear when additional names or citations are introduced without full explanation.

Your investigation is generally clear and logically structured, with a visible line of argument from context through causes to conclusion.

You use evidence from more than one source to support a causal argument rather than simply narrating events.

You show awareness that ethnicity, land grievances, political manipulation, and institutional failure all matter in explaining the violence.

At times the writing becomes repetitive, especially when similar claims are restated in different sections.

Some claims would be stronger with more precise citation and closer use of specific evidence from the sources.

Your conclusion would be more convincing if you ranked the causes more explicitly and showed more clearly how ethnicity functioned in relation to the deeper structural factors.