IB History HL Internal Assessment Example

You stated a focused, historically appropriate question that clearly invites judgement rather than simple description.

You selected relevant sources that connect directly to the investigation topic.

You evaluated both sources using origin, purpose, content, value, and limitation.

The question would be stronger if you defined more clearly what counts as a separate war before beginning the argument.

Your source evaluation could be more critical about bias, method, and how each source shapes interpretation.

One source contains an internal date inconsistency that should be checked and corrected.

Your investigation is generally clear and well organized, with a logical progression from introduction to body sections to conclusion.

You use a range of evidence to support your discussion and move beyond simple narration in several places.

You make comparative points about different actors, locations, and objectives, which helps the argument stay focused on the research question.

Your conclusion is directly tied to the line of argument developed in the essay.

Much of the writing still leans toward description, and some claims are asserted more strongly than they are demonstrated.

You need more explicit testing of counterarguments, especially the possibility that the conflicts are interconnected parts of a broader war.

Several key analytical claims would be stronger if you defined your criteria for separating one war from another more carefully.

Some paragraphs are very long and there is repetition of the main claim, which reduces efficiency.