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IB History HL Internal Assessment Exemplar: Did the Black Panther movement help or hinder the Civil Rights movement in the USA?

Did the Black Panther movement help or hinder the Civil Rights movement in the USA?

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Criteria A: Identification and evaluation of sources

5/6

Criteria Strands

Excellent

Research question formulation

Excellent

Source selection and relevance

Excellent

Source analysis and evaluation

Criteria Feedback

Your research question is clearly stated and stays focused throughout the work.
You selected two highly relevant sources that give contrasting viewpoints and support the investigation well.
You evaluate both sources with genuine attention to origin, purpose, content, value, and limitation.

Your question could be narrower by defining what counts as 'help' or 'hinder' more precisely.
The FBI source evaluation would be stronger with more precise provenance such as specific memo dates or authors.
You could say more about what declassification, redaction, or institutional self-protection may leave out.

Criteria B: Investigation

9/15

Criteria Strands

Good

Organization and clarity

Good

Critical analysis and evidence use

Good

Perspective evaluation and conclusion

Criteria Feedback

Your investigation is generally clear and well organized, with a logical line of argument that is easy to follow.
You use evidence from a good range of sources, including primary material and historians, to support your points.
You show real awareness of different interpretations and build toward a reasoned conclusion that answers the question.

Some claims would be stronger with more careful qualification or direct corroboration.
At times the analysis becomes a little assertion-led and could explain causation more carefully.
The transitions between supportive and critical points could be smoother and less repetitive.

Criteria C: Reflection

2/4

Criteria Strands

Excellent

Methods reflection

Excellent

Historical challenges awareness

Excellent

Connection to investigation

Criteria Feedback

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Overall Score: 16/25

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Criteria A: Identification and evaluation of sources

5/6

Criteria Strands

Excellent

Research question formulation

Excellent

Source selection and relevance

Excellent

Source analysis and evaluation

Criteria Feedback

Your research question is clearly stated and stays focused throughout the work.
You selected two highly relevant sources that give contrasting viewpoints and support the investigation well.
You evaluate both sources with genuine attention to origin, purpose, content, value, and limitation.

Your question could be narrower by defining what counts as 'help' or 'hinder' more precisely.
The FBI source evaluation would be stronger with more precise provenance such as specific memo dates or authors.
You could say more about what declassification, redaction, or institutional self-protection may leave out.

Criteria B: Investigation

9/15

Criteria Strands

Good

Organization and clarity

Good

Critical analysis and evidence use

Good

Perspective evaluation and conclusion

Criteria Feedback

Your investigation is generally clear and well organized, with a logical line of argument that is easy to follow.
You use evidence from a good range of sources, including primary material and historians, to support your points.
You show real awareness of different interpretations and build toward a reasoned conclusion that answers the question.

Some claims would be stronger with more careful qualification or direct corroboration.
At times the analysis becomes a little assertion-led and could explain causation more carefully.
The transitions between supportive and critical points could be smoother and less repetitive.

Criteria C: Reflection

2/4

Criteria Strands

Excellent

Methods reflection

Excellent

Historical challenges awareness

Excellent

Connection to investigation

Criteria Feedback

Lorem ipsum dolor sit amet, consectetur adipiscing elit, sed do eiusmod tempor incididunt ut labore et dolore magna aliqua.
Ut enim ad minim veniam, quis nostrud exercitation ullamco laboris nisi ut aliquip ex ea commodo consequat.

Duis aute irure dolor in reprehenderit in voluptate velit esse cillum dolore eu fugiat nulla pariatur.
Excepteur sint occaecat cupidatat non proident, sunt in culpa qui officia deserunt mollit anim id est laborum.

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