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IB Global Politics SL Internal Assessment Example
To what extent has the NGO Fondazione Ravasi Garzanti been effective in supporting and valorizing the elderly in the city of Milan since 2020?SL
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Official IB Result
16/20
Criteria A: A: Identification of issue and justification
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Criteria StrandsPro
A.1Identification of issue and justification
Excellent
Criteria Feedback
The student identifies a clear and focused political issue and connects it convincingly to development and human rights.
The student's personal motivation is credible and makes the choice of engagement feel purposeful rather than generic.
The student links the local case to broader global-political concerns in a way that is easy to follow.
The wording of the timeframe is not fully consistent throughout the submission.
The link from the student's personal interest to the exact research question could be stated more directly.
A sharper final sentence in the introduction would make the justification feel even more academically precise.
1.1·Strength
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The student gives a credible personal rationale for choosing the issue. This helps justify the engagement because it shows a genuine connection to the local context rather than a purely abstract topic choice.
1.2·Strength
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The student clearly frames ageing as a political issue, not just a social concern. This strengthens the inquiry by showing why the topic matters to global politics and prepares the reader for a development-and-rights based analysis.
1.3·Suggestion
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The student should avoid leaving the transition this open-ended and instead make the link to the exact research question more direct. A brief sentence showing how ageing, development, and human rights lead specifically to the question about Fondazione Ravasi Garzanti would sharpen the justification.
1.4·Strength
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The engagement is well justified through a concrete encounter with the foundation’s work. Linking the research question to a real cultural activity makes the choice of case study feel purposeful and relevant.
1.5·Question
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How does this personal connection help the student avoid simply assuming the foundation is effective? Bringing the emotional motivation into dialogue with evidence would make the justification more academically convincing.
1.6·Weakness
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The research focus is clear, but the choice of 2021 does not fully match the research question’s wording on page 1, which asks about effectiveness “since 2020.” The student should make the timeframe consistent throughout the submission to avoid weakening the justification.
Criteria B: B: Explanation of the engagement
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Criteria StrandsPro
B.1Explanation of the engagement
Good
Criteria Feedback
The student clearly describes the three engagements and explains why each participant was relevant to their inquiry.
The student shows that the experiences changed and expanded their understanding rather than simply recording that the interviews happened.
The student makes useful links between the engagement and broader political ideas such as NGO decision-making, state oversight, and research as a response to social problems.
Some reflections stay general and would be stronger with specific interview evidence.
The student does not always spell out exactly how a response shifted their thinking.
The distinct contribution of each engagement is not always fully separated, so the added value of each perspective could be clearer.
2.1·Strength
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The student reflects on a genuine learning moment here rather than merely reporting that an interview happened. This works well because it shows how the engagement changed the student’s understanding of how NGOs operate.
2.2·Suggestion
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The reflection would be stronger if the student named the exact response or example that revealed this insight. Quoting or paraphrasing one concrete statement from the interview would show more clearly how the engagement changed the student’s thinking.
2.3·Strength
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The student makes a useful connection between the interview and a broader political insight: research as a tool for responding to complex problems. This helps show how the engagement developed understanding beyond the specific case study.
2.4·Suggestion
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The student could strengthen this strand by explaining what was learned from the collaboration question, not just that it was asked. A sentence about how the official’s answer altered the student’s view of NGO-state cooperation would add depth.
2.5·Question
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What did the professor’s perspective reveal that the other two interviewees did not? Identifying that distinct contribution would help the student show why this engagement added something unique to the overall investigation.
2.6·Strength
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This is a strong explanation of why the municipal perspective matters. The student shows awareness that the engagement was not just descriptive, but used to test the NGO’s effectiveness from outside the foundation itself.
Criteria C: C: Analysis of issue
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Criteria StrandsPro
C.1Analysis of issue
Good
Criteria Feedback
The student moves beyond description by linking the foundation’s local focus to a development theory.
The student explains a plausible mechanism for why local knowledge can improve effectiveness.
The student uses concepts such as the Capability Approach, human rights, power, and interdependence in ways that support their argument.
The student identifies a real limitation in the foundation’s collaboration with the municipality, which gives their analysis a more balanced tone.
Several claims about effectiveness remain asserted rather than fully demonstrated with concrete evidence.
The student would strengthen the argument by adding outcome data, beneficiary testimony, or more detailed interview evidence.
Some analytical points are promising but remain broad and would benefit from tighter explanation of how the evidence proves the claim.
3.1·Strength
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The student begins to move beyond description by linking the foundation’s local focus to a development theory. This is effective because it shows the analysis is not only about what the NGO does, but why that approach matters politically.
3.2·Weakness
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The claim is persuasive but still largely asserted. The student should add concrete evidence of outcomes—such as participation numbers, observed changes, or beneficiary testimony—to show why the approach is actually effective rather than simply well-intentioned.
3.3·Suggestion
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Consider linking this historical claim more directly to the NGO’s present-day effectiveness. Explaining how the founder’s legacy shapes current policy choices or service design would make the analysis more focused and politically useful.
3.4·Strength
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This is a clear analytical link between local knowledge and effectiveness. The student explains the mechanism of impact, which is stronger than simply stating that the foundation is “good” at helping elderly people.
3.5·Strength
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The student identifies a second major line of analysis and signals thematic organisation. This helps structure the argument and shows that the analysis is based on multiple dimensions of the issue rather than a single claim.
3.6·Question
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What evidence shows that this holistic strategy produces better outcomes than a narrower approach would? Comparing the foundation’s approach with an alternative model would make the analysis more critical.
3.7·Strength
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This is a strong analytical move because the student uses a concept to interpret the foundation’s strategy rather than just naming the concept. The Capability Approach is relevant here because it connects service provision to freedom, dignity, and opportunity.
3.8·Weakness
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This conclusion is reasonable, but it remains broad and under-justified. The student should explain exactly how each element reinforces the others using specific examples from the interviews or the foundation’s activities.
3.9·Weakness
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The argument would be stronger if the student finished the idea with a precise link to a development or human rights principle. As written, the sentence gestures toward analysis but stops short of fully demonstrating the claim.
3.10·Strength
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The student does not present the NGO as uncritically successful; a clear limitation is identified and tied to interview evidence. This balanced approach strengthens the analysis because it shows the student is testing the case rather than merely praising it.
3.11·Weakness
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This is a plausible inference, but it is not fully tested against evidence from the engagement. The student should show what practical barriers or incentives make this collaboration likely or difficult, rather than assuming that cooperation automatically improves outcomes.
Criteria D: D: Synthesis and evaluation
5/6
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Criteria StrandsPro
D.1Synthesis and evaluation
Good
Criteria Feedback
The student connects the engagement clearly to theory and uses that theory to support their overall judgement.
The student weighs strengths and limitations rather than presenting a one-sided conclusion.
The student shows awareness of a methodological gap and thinks about how future research could address it.
The student's conclusion returns to the research question and gives a qualified overall judgement.
The final evaluation would be stronger if the student balanced praise and caution more explicitly in the same conclusion.
Some theoretical links are used more to confirm the student's view than to test alternative interpretations.
The lack of direct beneficiary voices limits how fully the student can evaluate the issue from multiple perspectives.
4.1·Strength
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The student synthesises theory and experience effectively here. The Capability Approach is not only named but used to interpret the NGO’s work, which shows clear conceptual understanding and supports the broader judgement.
4.2·Question
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If the partnership has already produced positive projects, what exactly is missing from the current collaboration model? Clarifying this would help the student judge whether the limitation is structural, practical, or simply a matter of scale.
4.3·Strength
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This is a strong evaluative turn because the student weighs a strength against a limitation using evidence from a different stakeholder. That balance is essential for synthesis, since it prevents the conclusion from becoming one-sided.
4.4·Strength
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The conclusion clearly returns to the research question and shows what the student learned about global politics. This is effective synthesis because it connects the local case to a wider political pattern rather than stopping at the case itself.
4.5·Weakness
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The final judgement is promising, but it would be stronger if the student explicitly balanced praise with caveats in the same sentence. At the moment, the evaluation is still somewhat formulaic; a sharper weighing of evidence would make the conclusion more convincing.
4.6·Strength
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The student demonstrates sound evaluation by identifying a methodological limitation in the evidence base. Recognising this gap strengthens the overall judgement because it shows awareness of what the investigation can and cannot prove.
4.7·Weakness
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This is an important evaluative insight, but it should be integrated earlier in the analysis rather than left mainly for the conclusion. Bringing this limitation into the body paragraphs would allow the student to qualify claims as they are made.
4.8·Suggestion
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The student could strengthen the evaluation by explaining which future method would best address which limitation. For example, an anonymised survey might recover breadth, while caregiver interviews might recover lived experience; that distinction would make the research design more rigorous.