To what extent are Non-Governmental Organisations (NGO’s) effective in advocating for the rights of female victims of Gender-based Violence since 2014 in Kibera Slums, Kenya?HL
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Official IB Result
IB Grade: 7
Criteria A: A: Identification of issue and justification
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A.1Identification of issue and justification
Excellent
Criteria Feedback
- The issue is stated clearly and directly, so the student's reader immediately understands the political focus.
- The student's research question is tightly bounded by actor, population, place, and timeframe.
- The student explains their personal and academic motivation well and shows why the issue matters in global politics.
- The student's opening makes a clear connection between the engagement and core course ideas such as human rights, equality, violence, non-state actors, and feminism.
- Some of the broader global examples could be trimmed so the justification reaches the Kibera case sooner.
- A few early examples feel more general than necessary and do not add much to the local focus.
- The local problem could be linked even more explicitly to the research question earlier in the introduction.
Criteria B: B: Explanation of the engagement
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B.1Explanation of the engagement
Excellent
Criteria Feedback
- The student describes the engagement activities clearly and in enough detail for the reader to understand what they actually did.
- The student includes a range of relevant perspectives, which makes the experience feel grounded and credible.
- The student shows that they learned more than basic facts by explaining what the engagement revealed about NGO support, advocacy, and survivor needs.
- The student recognises both the strengths and the limits of NGO responses, which shows thoughtful reflection rather than simple narration.
- At times, the explanation could use more precise political language when describing what NGOs do.
- The reflection would be even stronger if the student explained more explicitly what each engagement taught them about immediate support versus longer-term empowerment.
- A few claims could be sharpened so the political significance of the experiences comes through even more clearly.
Criteria C: C: Analysis of issue
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C.1Analysis of issue
Good
Criteria Feedback
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Criteria D: D: Synthesis and evaluation
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D.1Synthesis and evaluation
Good
Criteria Feedback
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