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IB World Studies SL Extended Essay Exemplar: To what extent does the destruction of cultural heritage sites, particularly libraries and archives, exacerbate the global issue of knowledge loss in developing nations— evidenced by a comparison of the intellectual and economic consequences of the destruction of the Library of Alexandria (323 BCE–476 CE) and the ISIS destruction of cultural heritage in Iraq and Syria (2014–2017)?
To what extent does the destruction of cultural heritage sites, particularly libraries and archives, exacerbate the global issue of knowledge loss in developing nations— evidenced by a comparison of the intellectual and economic consequences of the destruction of the Library of Alexandria (323 BCE–476 CE) and the ISIS destruction of cultural heritage in Iraq and Syria (2014–2017)?
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Criteria A: Focus and Method
5/6
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6
Criteria Strands
Excellent
Topic identification and communication
Good
Research question formulation
Good
Methodology selection and justification
Criteria Feedback
You communicate a clear interdisciplinary topic and keep the comparison between the two case studies visible throughout the essay.
Your research question is specific and framed in a way that allows comparison rather than simple description.
Your choice of historical and economic methods is broadly appropriate for the inquiry you are trying to answer.
The scope of the question is a little broad, which makes parts of the argument feel less tightly controlled than they could be.
The developing-nations framing is not equally precise across both case studies.
Your method would be stronger if you explained more clearly how each source type helps answer the different parts of the question.
Criteria B: Knowledge and Understanding
4/6
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3
6
Criteria Strands
Good
Source material selection and relevance
Good
Knowledge demonstration and application
Good
Use of terminology and concepts
Criteria Feedback
You use source material that is relevant to both the historical and economic dimensions of the investigation.
Your knowledge of the two case studies is clear and generally applied in a coherent way.
You use a good range of key concepts and terminology from both disciplines, and most of the terms are used accurately.
Some of the source choices are more general background sources than sharply selected expert material.
At times, your conceptual language is used more as support for the discussion than as deeply developed analysis.
A few claims move beyond what the evidence can securely support, especially where the evidence is limited or indirect.
Criteria C: Critical Thinking
8/12
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12
Criteria Strands
Moderate
Research quality and relevance
Moderate
Analysis and conclusions
Moderate
Argument structure and evaluation
Criteria Feedback
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Criteria D: Presentation
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4
Criteria Strands
Excellent
Academic structure
Excellent
Visual elements
Moderate
Referencing and formatting
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Ut enim ad minim veniam, quis nostrud exercitation ullamco laboris nisi ut aliquip ex ea commodo consequat.
Duis aute irure dolor in reprehenderit in voluptate velit esse cillum dolore eu fugiat nulla pariatur.
Excepteur sint occaecat cupidatat non proident, sunt in culpa qui officia deserunt mollit anim id est laborum.
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