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IB World Studies SL Extended Essay Example
Has Hungary’s excise tax on foods and beverages with high sugar, salt and caffeine content (the Public Health Product Tax) had an impact on consumption of these goods and consequently obesity rates amongst the population since its implementation in 2011?SL
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Criteria A: Focus and Method
5/6
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3
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Criteria Strands
A.1Topic identification and communication
Excellent
A.2Research question formulation
Excellent
A.3Methodology selection and justification
Excellent
Criteria Feedback
Your topic is introduced clearly and stays anchored to the Hungarian public health tax throughout the report.
Your research question is specific, focused, and clearly tied to both economic and health outcomes.
You justify your source choices well and use a sensible mix of policy documents, datasets, and academic research.
Your introduction briefly ranges too widely before fully narrowing to the case study.
The methodology would be stronger if you explained more explicitly how your sources help answer the question and what their limitations are.
Some of your justification reads as descriptive rather than fully analytical.
Criteria B: Knowledge and Understanding
5/6
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3
6
Criteria Strands
B.1Source material selection and relevance
Good
B.2Knowledge demonstration and application
Good
B.3Use of terminology and concepts
Good
Criteria Feedback
You demonstrate sound knowledge of the biological and economic ideas behind the policy.
Your use of terminology is generally accurate and appropriate in both disciplines.
You select mostly relevant sources that support the biological mechanism and the policy context.
A few source choices are weaker or less academic than the strongest evidence in the report.
There is an important terminology error where triglycerides are misnamed.
Some links between concepts are asserted rather than fully demonstrated.
Criteria C: Critical Thinking
11/12
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6
12
Criteria Strands
C.1Research quality and relevance
Good
C.2Analysis and conclusions
Good
C.3Argument structure and evaluation
Good
Criteria Feedback
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Criteria D: Presentation
2/4
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2
4
Criteria Strands
D.1Academic structure
Excellent
D.2Visual elements
Moderate
D.3Referencing and formatting
Moderate
Criteria Feedback
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Ut enim ad minim veniam, quis nostrud exercitation ullamco laboris nisi ut aliquip ex ea commodo consequat.
Duis aute irure dolor in reprehenderit in voluptate velit esse cillum dolore eu fugiat nulla pariatur.
Excepteur sint occaecat cupidatat non proident, sunt in culpa qui officia deserunt mollit anim id est laborum.
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