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IB History SL Extended Essay Exemplar: To what extent were the events of Bloody Sunday both "unjustified and unjustifiable"?
To what extent were the events of Bloody Sunday both "unjustified and unjustifiable"?
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Overall Score
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Criteria A: Focus and Method
6/6
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3
6
Criteria Strands
Excellent
Topic communication and appropriateness
Excellent
Research question clarity and focus
Excellent
Methodology completeness and appropriateness
Criteria Feedback
The topic is communicated accurately and effectively, with clear definitions of key terms (‘unjustified’ and ‘unjustifiable’) and sustained thematic coherence throughout.
The research question is precise, focused, and consistently returned to in each analytical section, anchoring the investigation.
A broad and relevant range of primary and secondary sources is employed, demonstrating informed selection and appropriate methodological scope.
Methodology overview lacks an explicit evaluative framework (e.g., OPVL) to justify source selection, which would enhance transparency and rigor.
Criteria B: Knowledge and Understanding
6/6
0
3
6
Criteria Strands
Excellent
Application of source material
Excellent
Subject knowledge and understanding
Excellent
Use of terminology and concepts
Criteria Feedback
Source material is clearly relevant and consistently tied back to the research question, including inquiry transcripts and academic analyses.
Subject knowledge is presented coherently, with accurate contextual detail and clear understanding of historiographical debates.
Discipline-specific terminology (e.g., proportionality, rules of engagement, historiography) is used precisely and applied consistently.
Occasional over-reliance on a few secondary web articles and a couple of lengthy block quotations slightly weaken the balance of source deployment.
Criteria C: Critical Thinking
10/12
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6
12
Criteria Strands
Good
Research quality
Good
Analysis depth
Moderate
Discussion and evaluation
Criteria Feedback
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Criteria D: Presentation
4/4
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2
4
Criteria Strands
Good
Structure appropriateness
Moderate
Layout and formatting
Criteria Feedback
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Ut enim ad minim veniam, quis nostrud exercitation ullamco laboris nisi ut aliquip ex ea commodo consequat.
Duis aute irure dolor in reprehenderit in voluptate velit esse cillum dolore eu fugiat nulla pariatur.
Excepteur sint occaecat cupidatat non proident, sunt in culpa qui officia deserunt mollit anim id est laborum.
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