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IB German B SL Extended Essay Example
Wie haben die ost- und westdeutschen Medien ideologische Unterschiede durch Wortwahl und Wortfrequenz gespiegelt?SL
C
Official IB Result
18/34
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Criteria A: Focus and Method
5/6
0
3
6
Criteria Strands
A.1Topic communication and appropriateness
Excellent
A.2Research question clarity and focus
Excellent
A.3Methodology completeness
Good
Criteria Feedback
Clear and effective communication of topic with explicit purpose and focus throughout.
Research question is clearly stated, specific, and consistently drives the investigation.
Methodology lacks justification for single-exemplar selection and reliability procedures.
Insufficient rationale for semantic category design and absence of validation steps.
1.1·Strength
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The title and research question are presented prominently, providing precise focus on comparing East- and West-German media through word choice and frequency. This ensures clarity of scope and aligns purposefully with the investigation’s aims.
1.2·Strength
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The introduction succinctly communicates purpose and focus, showing why ideological influence on language merits study. This establishes a strong foundation for the investigation.
1.3·Weakness
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Reflective consideration of setbacks and next-step actions is absent. Include evaluative commentary on how methodological or analytical challenges shaped the final report.
1.4·Weakness
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Methodology outlines tools and categories but omits justification for selecting single exemplars and reliability procedures. Include rationale for sample size and steps ensuring inter-rater reliability.
1.5·Suggestion
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Specify criteria used to devise semantic categories and report any pilot testing or validation of these classifications to demonstrate informed methodological choices.
Criteria B: Knowledge and Understanding
3/6
0
3
6
Criteria Strands
B.1Application of source material
Moderate
B.2Subject knowledge
Moderate
B.3Use of terminology and concepts
Moderate
Criteria Feedback
Generally relevant and appropriate application of primary source material to the discussion.
Use of key German linguistic concepts (e.g., Wortfrequenz, semantische Felder) is evident.
German terminology is inconsistently applied and contains spelling/grammar errors.
Historical background contains imprecisions and some data presentations lack clear citations and labels.
2.1·Weakness
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German grammar and spelling errors (e.g., "der Nachrichtenartikel, Nationalhymne ... benutzt werden benutzen") distract from the academic register. Review and correct metalanguage for clarity and precision.
2.2·Weakness
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Historical context in the introduction is presented but contains inaccuracies (e.g., motives for Berlin Wall construction). Verify facts with reliable academic sources to strengthen subject knowledge.
Criteria C: Critical Thinking
5/12
0
6
12
Criteria Strands
C.1Research quality
Moderate
C.2Analysis depth
Poor
C.3Discussion and evaluation
Poor
Criteria Feedback
Research materials are well chosen and clearly relevant to the research question.
Analysis links word-frequency data to ideological interpretation and the conclusion synthesizes findings coherently.
Depth of analysis is superficial with broad generalisations and limited engagement with linguistic frameworks.
Evaluation of methodological limitations is brief, with insufficient critical reflection on validity and next steps.
3.1·Suggestion
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Personal engagement emerges in anecdotal commentary about the research tools, but deeper evaluative reflection on learning and skill development would raise this section.
3.2·Strength
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Analysis correctly links frequent words to ideological stance, demonstrating logical connections between data and interpretation.
3.3·Suggestion
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Sentence-level analysis often relies on sweeping generalisations (e.g., linking ‘funktionswörter’ to propaganda broadly) without sufficient linguistic evidence. Deepen analysis by engaging with specific syntactic or semantic frameworks.
3.4·Weakness
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Discussion of limitations (sample size, category bias) is brief. Explicitly address how these affect validity and propose next-step remedies.
3.5·Suggestion
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Ensure that each chart in the data presentation section references the research question in its caption, highlighting direct relevance for Critical Thinking.
3.6·Strength
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The analysis in the conclusion synthesizes findings across media types effectively, drawing coherent links to the research question.
3.7·Strength
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The conclusion effectively ties together comparative insights across media forms, demonstrating coherent argumentation aligned with the research question.
Criteria D: Presentation
2/4
0
2
4
Criteria Strands
D.1Structure appropriateness
Good
D.2Layout considerations
Poor
Criteria Feedback
Structure is clear and complete, with logical sequencing of sections and effective headings.
Page numbering is inconsistent and many tables/figures lack captions or proper IB citation formatting.
Bibliography formatting is uneven and layout elements (legends, labels) are partially missing.
4.1·Strength
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Structure follows a clear organization with distinct sections for introduction, analysis, data presentation, and conclusion, aiding reader navigation.
4.2·Suggestion
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Word lists in the text lack clear labels and captions. Every table and figure should have a descriptive title and reference in the text for ease of interpretation.
4.3·Weakness
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Data presentation charts lack axis labels and clear legends. Label each axis and provide a legend describing colors and categories to improve interpretability.
4.4·Suggestion
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URLs are embedded in footnotes rather than integrated in a reference list format. Move persistent links into the bibliography and ensure IB citation guidelines are followed.
4.5·Weakness
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Bibliography entries exhibit inconsistent formatting and missing publisher details. Adopt a uniform citation style, including complete publication information and DOIs where available.
4.6·Suggestion
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Some data tables in the appendix lack clear column headings and context statements. Provide descriptive headers and introductory notes so readers understand data origin and relevance.
4.7·Suggestion
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Academic tone is occasionally compromised by colloquial expressions (“ganz schön komisch”). Maintain formal register throughout the report to uphold scholarly rigor.