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IB Film SL Extended Essay Exemplar: How do the contemporary Indonesian coming-of-age films,"Nanti Kita Cerita Tentang Hari Ini"(2020) and "Keluarga Cemara (2018), represent family struggles in the context of Indonesian society through their distinct visual styles?"
How do the contemporary Indonesian coming-of-age films,"Nanti Kita Cerita Tentang Hari Ini"(2020) and "Keluarga Cemara (2018), represent family struggles in the context of Indonesian society through their distinct visual styles?"
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Overall Score
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Criteria A: Focus and Method
5/6
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3
6
Criteria Strands
Excellent
Topic communication and appropriateness
Good
Research question clarity and focus
Moderate
Methodology completeness and effectiveness
Criteria Feedback
Topic is communicated accurately and effectively, with a clear and appropriate focus on visual style and family struggle.
The research question is clearly stated, well‐focused, and effectively connected to the structure of the essay.
The methodology draws on an appropriate range of relevant primary film analysis and secondary sources, with evidence of informed selection.
Scope is somewhat over‐broad, combining two films and multiple visual parameters, which occasionally dilutes analytical depth.
Methodological rationale is not fully articulated and lacks sustained engagement with formal film‐studies theory.
Sections of historical context sometimes detract from the core analytical focus.
Criteria B: Knowledge and Understanding
4/6
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3
6
Criteria Strands
Good
Subject knowledge and source application
Good
Use of terminology and concepts
Criteria Feedback
Demonstrates clear subject knowledge of Indonesian cinema history and filmic concepts.
Applies terminology such as mise-en-scène, framing, and motivated lighting accurately and consistently to support analysis.
Links technical visual elements to thematic interpretations in the two films.
Reliance on journalistic and web‐based sources limits academic depth.
Some sections drift into descriptive background rather than analytical application to the research question.
Advanced theoretical concepts (e.g., semiotics, spectatorship) are under-utilized.
Criteria C: Critical Thinking
8/12
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6
12
Criteria Strands
Moderate
Research quality and relevance
Moderate
Analysis depth and effectiveness
Moderate
Discussion and evaluation
Criteria Feedback
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Criteria D: Presentation
3/4
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2
4
Criteria Strands
Excellent
Structure appropriateness
Good
Layout and formatting
Criteria Feedback
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