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IB English B SL Extended Essay Example

How did Aretha Franklin’s songs become anthems to Feminism and Civil rights movement?SL

Overall Score

25/28

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Criteria A: Focus and Method

5/6

Criteria Strands

A.1Topic communication and appropriateness

Excellent

A.2Research question clarity and focus

Good

A.3Methodology completeness

Good

Criteria Feedback

You communicate a clear and relevant research focus that stays connected to the central question throughout most of the essay.
Your topic is well framed and appropriate for the subject area, with a sustained emphasis on music as political and cultural expression.
Your method is generally coherent, with a visible attempt to select songs and analyse them in a structured way.
You keep returning to the idea of songs functioning as anthems, which gives the essay a consistent direction.

Your research question is broad and not fully narrowed to one precise line of inquiry.
The time frame is not consistently followed, which makes the scope feel a little uneven.
Your method would be stronger if you explained more clearly why each source type was chosen and how you judged their usefulness.
Some parts of the focus drift toward general historical discussion rather than tightly supporting the exact wording of the question.

Criteria B: Knowledge and Understanding

5/6

Criteria Strands

B.1Application of source material

Good

B.2Subject knowledge

Good

B.3Use of terminology and concepts

Excellent

Criteria Feedback

You show clear knowledge of Aretha Franklin’s repertoire and the historical contexts surrounding the songs you choose.
You apply source material in relevant ways, especially when using lyrics and contextual evidence to support your points.
You use terminology such as empowerment, patriarchy, identity, and racial pride accurately and consistently overall.
You demonstrate understanding that a song’s meaning can change when it is performed in a different social or political context.

Some claims are stated broadly without enough specific evidence to make them fully convincing.
A few references rely on weaker or less academic sources, which reduces the reliability of parts of the discussion.
At times your writing becomes more narrative than analytical, so the historical information does not always deepen the argument.
Some conceptual terms, especially the idea of an anthem, would be stronger if you defined them more precisely through evidence.

Criteria C: Critical Thinking

11/12

Criteria Strands

C.1Research quality

Moderate

C.2Analysis depth

Moderate

C.3Discussion and evaluation

Moderate

Criteria Feedback

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Criteria D: Presentation

4/4

Criteria Strands

D.1Structure appropriateness

Excellent

D.2Layout considerations

Excellent

Criteria Feedback

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IB English B SL Extended Essay Example

How did Aretha Franklin’s songs become anthems to Feminism and Civil rights movement?SL

Overall Score

25/28

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Criteria A: Focus and Method

5/6

Criteria Strands

A.1Topic communication and appropriateness

Excellent

A.2Research question clarity and focus

Good

A.3Methodology completeness

Good

Criteria Feedback

You communicate a clear and relevant research focus that stays connected to the central question throughout most of the essay.
Your topic is well framed and appropriate for the subject area, with a sustained emphasis on music as political and cultural expression.
Your method is generally coherent, with a visible attempt to select songs and analyse them in a structured way.
You keep returning to the idea of songs functioning as anthems, which gives the essay a consistent direction.

Your research question is broad and not fully narrowed to one precise line of inquiry.
The time frame is not consistently followed, which makes the scope feel a little uneven.
Your method would be stronger if you explained more clearly why each source type was chosen and how you judged their usefulness.
Some parts of the focus drift toward general historical discussion rather than tightly supporting the exact wording of the question.

Criteria B: Knowledge and Understanding

5/6

Criteria Strands

B.1Application of source material

Good

B.2Subject knowledge

Good

B.3Use of terminology and concepts

Excellent

Criteria Feedback

You show clear knowledge of Aretha Franklin’s repertoire and the historical contexts surrounding the songs you choose.
You apply source material in relevant ways, especially when using lyrics and contextual evidence to support your points.
You use terminology such as empowerment, patriarchy, identity, and racial pride accurately and consistently overall.
You demonstrate understanding that a song’s meaning can change when it is performed in a different social or political context.

Some claims are stated broadly without enough specific evidence to make them fully convincing.
A few references rely on weaker or less academic sources, which reduces the reliability of parts of the discussion.
At times your writing becomes more narrative than analytical, so the historical information does not always deepen the argument.
Some conceptual terms, especially the idea of an anthem, would be stronger if you defined them more precisely through evidence.

Criteria C: Critical Thinking

11/12

Criteria Strands

C.1Research quality

Moderate

C.2Analysis depth

Moderate

C.3Discussion and evaluation

Moderate

Criteria Feedback

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Ut enim ad minim veniam, quis nostrud exercitation ullamco laboris nisi ut aliquip ex ea commodo consequat.

Duis aute irure dolor in reprehenderit in voluptate velit esse cillum dolore eu fugiat nulla pariatur.
Excepteur sint occaecat cupidatat non proident, sunt in culpa qui officia deserunt mollit anim id est laborum.

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Criteria D: Presentation

4/4

Criteria Strands

D.1Structure appropriateness

Excellent

D.2Layout considerations

Excellent

Criteria Feedback

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Ut enim ad minim veniam, quis nostrud exercitation ullamco laboris nisi ut aliquip ex ea commodo consequat.

Duis aute irure dolor in reprehenderit in voluptate velit esse cillum dolore eu fugiat nulla pariatur.
Excepteur sint occaecat cupidatat non proident, sunt in culpa qui officia deserunt mollit anim id est laborum.

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