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IB English A Lang & Lit SL Extended Essay Example
How does Toni Morrison use the motif of haunting in her characters to
explore the lasting psychological trauma of slavery in Beloved?SL
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Official IB Result
22/34
Criteria A: Focus and Method
4/6
0
3
6
Criteria StrandsPro
A.1Topic communication and clarity
Excellent
A.2Research question focus and appropriateness
Excellent
A.3Methodology completeness and effectiveness
Moderate
Criteria Feedback
The student establishes a clear literary focus on haunting, trauma, and Morrison’s treatment of slavery’s legacy.
The student's research question is specific enough to guide the essay and stays connected to the novel for most of the discussion.
The student makes some purposeful choices in selecting features such as structure, symbolism, and narration as routes into the text.
The student's research process is not explained clearly enough, especially where interviews and secondary theory are mentioned.
Some parts of the discussion drift into broad claims about trauma rather than staying tightly tied to the research question.
The methodology feels only partly controlled because the use of sources is not always transparent or well integrated.
1.1·Strength
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The research question is specific, literary, and clearly connected to the novel’s concerns. The student’s use of “motif of haunting” creates a workable lens that can be traced through characterisation, structure, and symbolism.
1.2·Strength
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The title clearly signals the novel, the central motif of haunting, and the historical-psychological focus. This gives the reader an immediate sense of purpose and helps establish a tightly framed investigation from the start.
1.3·Suggestion
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The argument would be stronger if the student linked this claim to a specific scene or formal feature immediately after making it. Doing so would make the method feel more deliberate and would show exactly how the research question is being pursued through the novel.
1.4·Suggestion
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The methodological idea is interesting, but the study needs clearer explanation of how these interviews shaped the analysis. The student should specify who was interviewed, how the responses were used, and why this approach was more useful than relying on published trauma criticism alone.
1.5·Weakness
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This description is too vague to function as a transparent methodology. The student should explain the sequence of the research process, what questions were asked, and how the interview evidence was selected and integrated into the essay.
1.6·Weakness
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The essay refers to theory through interview discussion, but the source chain is not properly established. The student should distinguish between direct research into Caruth and any expert interpretation of Caruth, otherwise the methodology looks under-evidenced and difficult to verify.
Criteria B: Knowledge and Understanding
4/6
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3
6
Criteria StrandsPro
B.1Knowledge of topic and sources
Moderate
B.2Use of terminology and concepts
Good
Criteria Feedback
The student shows a solid understanding of the novel’s central characters, events, and traumatic concerns.
The student uses a range of relevant literary terms such as motif, fragmentation, symbolism, and narration.
The student often connects these concepts to the novel’s atmosphere and emotional patterns in a meaningful way.
There are several factual and naming inaccuracies that weaken confidence in the student's textual knowledge.
Some terminology is used accurately, but at other times the language is too vague or imprecise to show full conceptual control.
A few interpretive claims are overstated without enough textual precision to support them.
2.1·Strength
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This introduction shows secure knowledge of the novel’s central concerns and situates the text within an appropriate literary context. The student demonstrates an understanding of the historical burden that shapes the characters’ experiences.
2.2·Weakness
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The phrasing is imprecise, and the sentence obscures the intended meaning. The student should revise for accuracy and clarity so that the distinction between Beloved as a ghost, a memory, and a psychological burden is not blurred.
2.3·Weakness
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This contains a factual error: Denver is repeatedly called “Denise,” which weakens confidence in the essay’s knowledge of the novel. The student should correct character names carefully, because small errors like this can undermine otherwise relevant literary interpretation.
2.4·Strength
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The student recognises a key symbol and connects it to Paul D’s emotional containment. This works well because it moves beyond plot summary and shows awareness of how Morrison externalises psychological repression through imagery.
2.5·Suggestion
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The student could make the terminology more precise here by explaining what in the syntax creates that effect. Referring to sentence fragmentation, repetition, or pronoun instability would show more control over the concept of stream of consciousness.
2.6·Weakness
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This line makes an important idea, but the phrasing is too unclear to demonstrate full conceptual control. The student should simplify the sentence and explicitly distinguish between inherited trauma, isolation, and the eventual role of community support.
Criteria C: Critical Thinking
8/12
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6
12
Criteria StrandsPro
C.1Research quality and relevance
Poor
C.2Analysis depth and effectiveness
Poor
C.3Discussion and evaluation
Poor
Criteria Feedback
The student builds a discernible argument about haunting as a representation of the lasting psychological effects of slavery.
The student sometimes makes strong links between form and meaning, especially when discussing fragmented narration, memory, and symbolic objects.
The student shows some ability to move beyond summary and explain how Morrison’s techniques shape the reader’s understanding.
The analysis can become repetitive and sometimes restates the same idea rather than developing it further.
Secondary theory is often paraphrased rather than closely applied to specific moments in the novel.
The student's evaluation sometimes becomes too decisive, especially when the novel’s ambiguity calls for more nuance.
3.1·Strength
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This is a strong analytical claim because it links form to character experience. The student is not just identifying nonlinearity, but explaining how it reproduces traumatic consciousness for the reader, which is exactly the kind of literary analysis expected.
3.2·Weakness
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The theory is introduced, but the discussion remains paraphrased rather than analysed. The student should show how Caruth’s idea illuminates a specific moment in Beloved, instead of leaving the theory as a general explanatory statement.
3.3·Weakness
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The comparison is plausible, but it is asserted too broadly and without close textual support. The student should anchor the psychological claim in Morrison’s wording or narrative structure so that the interpretation feels earned rather than assumed.
3.4·Strength
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This is a thoughtful interpretive move because it connects narrative structure to cultural memory. The student shows awareness that Morrison’s form does thematic work, not just decorative work, which strengthens the essay’s argument about collective trauma.
3.5·Weakness
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This conclusion is too decisive and does not sufficiently engage with the novel’s ambiguity. The student should acknowledge that Morrison presents healing as partial, difficult, and uneven rather than straightforwardly resolved.
3.6·Question
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What alternative reading is possible here: could the reader’s disorientation also reflect Morrison’s refusal to make trauma fully legible or neatly resolved? Considering that possibility would make the evaluation more nuanced.
3.7·Weakness
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This is a strong idea, but it remains more thematic than analytical. The student should explain how specific moments of dialogue, imagery, or narrative positioning create this effect, rather than restating Beloved’s symbolic role in general terms.
3.8·Weakness
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The claim is relevant, but it would be stronger if the student evaluated tension within the novel rather than only asserting the conclusion. The essay should ask whether Beloved is simply a symbol, or whether Morrison deliberately keeps her meaning unstable.
3.9·Question
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Does the novel fully support this reading of repression, or does Morrison suggest that remembering can be painful but also necessary? Reflecting on that tension would deepen the critical evaluation.
3.10·Suggestion
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The conclusion would be more convincing if it briefly revisited the strongest textual evidence already discussed, such as the “tobacco tin” or Denver’s turn to community. That would make the final judgment feel synthesized rather than repeated.
Criteria D: Presentation
3/4
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2
4
Criteria StrandsPro
D.1Structure appropriateness
Excellent
D.2Layout and formatting
Excellent
Criteria Feedback
The essay has a clear overall structure with the main required sections in place.
The document is generally easy to follow because headings and front matter are used appropriately.
The work is readable and mostly organised in a logical sequence.
There are formatting inconsistencies and editorial errors that reduce the polish of the final document.
The conclusion is somewhat repetitive and could be more tightly synthesized.
Some bibliographic details and citation practices need closer checking.
4.1·Strength
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The document includes the required front matter and a clear table of contents, which makes the report easy to navigate. This shows good attention to the expected structure of an IB research essay.
4.2·Suggestion
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The conclusion would benefit from tighter synthesis and less repetition of earlier claims. The student could end by explicitly showing how the three main strands of the essay—structure, character, and symbol—work together to answer the research question.
4.3·Weakness
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This entry appears bibliographically inaccurate or incomplete, which affects the reliability of the reference list. The student should check each citation carefully for correct author attribution and publication details.
4.4·Weakness
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This is a rather weak source for a literary research investigation if used as a main authority on Freud. The student should prioritise academic books or peer-reviewed criticism when drawing on psychoanalytic theory.
4.5·Strength
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Including a Works Cited page is an important structural requirement, and the student has clearly separated the bibliography from the main body. This helps the reader locate the research base supporting the investigation.